Breathing is Like Phening

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cthowell1989's picture
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Breathings lost its meaning
My point of view is leaning
The past was all that I could see

Cause no one promised answers
Questions build like cancer
I wish I could just let it be

Everyone’s got problems
No one’s helps to solve them
The anchor is just heavier with me

It’s like I’m drowning in the ocean
Losing all emotion
Wish I could sink into the sea

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WolfLarsen's picture
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My faavorite line was:

My faavorite line was: "Questions build like cancer"

The poem would be stronger without the rhyme scheme meaning - leaning. Sometimes even accidental rhymes hurt the poem.

Have a nice day.

Wolf Larsen

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