Remember ( please critique )

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JessH's picture
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Remember me when but my soul remains,
When seeds have grown, if only you had known
With what joy my life was lived and with what stains,
I left upon this earth, my secrets sown,

Remember not those fateful days when with,
The bitterest resentment and despair,
I wasted precious moments thinking only,
Of mistakes i'd never before given care,

Don't let my footsteps wash away dragged to,
The raging sea, the waves, the waves, they sigh,
Eternal life awaits the strong and true,
No record of my being and alas my memory dies,

When words do fade, and pages start to rot,
Look to this verse, and friend, forget-me-not.

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hi

Good one..

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