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This life
From the very start of it
I've been told
Brainwashed, misled, molded
I must fall in love
In love I will be happy
Happiest endings will come if in love
All with their silver linings
Picture perfect, black and white
And that's what I wanted
Thought I had found it
Fought so hard
Then just lost it
This life felt after that
Less like what I wanted.

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SSmoothie's picture

Great work!

I enjoyed this write! I like what you're trying to achieve in this piece! :) cheers SS


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

WhatIAmOrWillBe's picture

thanks

I still feel that it needs a little bit
more of something though


jrfehlmann

SSmoothie's picture

i re read it again and again

I think it is perfect it is open enough for the reader to drawi thier own wxperiences through it and quite good in the way that it challenges what you are 'programmed' to want because you have been told to want it. some live quite happily with out it. others have it and lack passion others have passion and lack love some of the very lucky few of us have both. but passion in your own soul and to your success past survival means giving your life meaningl it does not have to be love but you should love something at least. :) when you have a kid and you finally feel the swell of irrefutable unconditional love you will no longer think this poem needs anything at all! wonderful work! and your latest piece is also a significant jump over the bar you have certainly grown as a poet yet again! congratulations!


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."