For Him <3

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Love

I stare into your eyes so blue
Why you like me I have no clue
Your strong arms around me tight
Makes me regret our pointless fights
I try and try but I fall for your charms
And soon enough I find myself in your arms
A kiss on the cheek sends me into a fit of joy
Such strong emotion because of 1 special boy
I can't imagine myself without you
What I would do I have no clue
Your words and your way mesmerize me so
They make me beg you not to go
I need you to know you are so dear
I'm always so happy when you're near
Promise our friendship will endure
Cuz loing you has no cure

Author's Notes/Comments: 

This is a poem I wrote for my boyfriend, it is not all of it but it is a good chunk of the beginning. I am quite interested in feedback and suggestions. Thanks :)

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martal_arts's picture

i think the beginning is good

i think the beginning is good loses a little flow after that. it kinda gets a little jumbled to me. but the important thing is do u like how it sounds?


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Sarxah's picture

well i did think it was okay,

well i did think it was okay, i mean i am always super harsh on my own work. But also I guess I just really liked him and wanted to get all these thoughts out

martal_arts's picture

i will say you do have a very

i will say you do have a very good way with words! good work!! high 5!!!


The one who has faith has every thing!