I’ve fallen in-love with you
The kind of love that lies
The one that is only as deep as our shared breathes
In the way we don’t speak
Feel awkward
Have colliding morals, religions, and senses of humour
The kind of love that lets it be okay because we make love like planets dying
A star gone super nova
Bursting bright and large across the universe
Than a sudden flash of blinding light and all is consumed and gone
Blackness
The kind of love that leaves with age and libido
And the lack of new positions to explore
The kind that says I feel this like a broken body
Deadly desire in my soul
Like air will choke unless it’s first crossed your lips
Like love can be found in your eyes looking into mine when you cum
Like our love could last as long as you just did
I’m in love with you
The hollow kind of love that lies
And it sucks
LOVE this! real and
LOVE this! real and fantastic.
*tallsquirrelgirl* she feels in italics and thinks in CAPITALS ~henry james
:) thanks...I hate the last
:) thanks...I hate the last line and may remove it...thoughts?
like I am thinking it would be stronger if it ended at "like our love could last as long as you just did"
Much Love
Ashley
I do like that...or it could
I do like that...or it could end at "the hollow kind of love that lies." It's yours, write it till you're slightly okay with how it turns out, that's what I do :)
*tallsquirrelgirl* she feels in italics and thinks in CAPITALS ~henry james
:) thanks
:) thanks
Much Love
Ashley
incrdible and real, sensual
incrdible and real, sensual and teasing, blunt and soft at the same time. love the tensions in this piece! a cut above hugss. - still no time for the essays! soz. ss
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
:0
thanks my dear
I finsihed that essay! Got an A, all is well, and sure enough, the fickle feeling felt is gone and all that is left as proof it was ever felt is this poem...
Much Love
Ashley
Wow!
OMG! This should be in RR just for the number of exquisite lines packed in here!
hmmmmmmmm
I will think about it, I don't really like this poem, then again whenever I like it least and everyone else likes it I end up loving it in time....
also, thanks :) HUGS, I am always glad when you enjoy a read!
Much Love
Ashley
;-)
soulmating! I usually don't like mine that others do, and love the ones that others don't get ;-) I enjoy everything you write Dear! Its all good, but some of it is better than what I had to study in college. (Unfortunately, they usually seem to wait until most poets are dead for a while to recognize their brillance, but I love ya NOW!:-D
hmmm...
time to fake my death and be taught in college! jks
I am falttered, thank you :) I guess I should be focusing on writing more eh?
Much Love
Ashley
Yep!
But the world does tend to get in the way, doesn't it ;-)