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             my spirtiual protector

             flys into the essence

            of the moonlight, he is

             nocturnal, a beautiful

            bird on snow white wings .

              

           *  this poem is all mine *

              

          

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THIS POEM IS ABOUT AN
OWL IT IS BEAUTIFUL AND
IT HANGS AROUND MY NEIGH
BORHOOD BECAUSE IT IS SO
VERY QUIET AND NICE UP
HERE TO LIVE SO I DONT
BLAME THE OWL FOR IT .
BECAUSE IT ALWAYS STAYS
COOL AND NICE UP HERE
  JUST LIKE AN AIR CONDIONER KIND OF COOL .

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last updated 12 October 2010 - 12:58am
©8 July 2004 - 6:16pm — poetvg
9 July 2004 - 4:11pm — tina_lynne
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you like to use essence and moon a lot...i noticed it was in the last poem of yours that i critiqued...you use bliss a lot too...after reading some of your others i noticed that...this one was better with imagery...but only when it came to the bird...again, too much telling...i want to SEE it in my mind..that means you need to describe the characters and give me something to go with...again...another good beginning...you have the foundation for something that could be good.