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* Candy Rain *

              a choclate river covers

                the entire coast and

                candy canes grow and

                cover up the land then

               a candy rain replenishs

               and cools down the earth .



             *  this poem is all mine  *

Author's Notes/Comments: 

this poem is about
  a candy rain that
i love to dream about
  because it is so   refreshing and cool its
is like a place where
lots of kids can go and
eat candy and be free  and swim in a all choclate river aint this
place so very sweet :*)

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©3 April 2004 - 7:56am — poetvg
7 April 2005 - 7:16pm — Katie Moak (not verified)
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i like this poem. its cute and original

17 March 2005 - 11:16pm — Natasha Cronsell (not verified)
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i like this one.
alot.
(hungry now).
thanks for commenting on my poem. i've wrote lots of new stuff, but i never have my notebook with me when im at the computer.

16 December 2004 - 10:23pm — Steven Danielson (not verified)
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hey, thanks for all the comments on my work. i really like this poem, its short and represents pure bliss and happiness.

23 April 2004 - 1:07pm — salphire5
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A lovely, happy thought Gail.

10 April 2004 - 4:06pm — Davey Arsenic (not verified)
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Very nice.

6 May 2004 - 2:17am — Tom Elio (not verified)
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I like this one..I can easily imagine swimming in chocolate. It feels so smooth. Don't know if I could eat it all :) Great visual. It is a freeing poem. Have you ever seen Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory..It's similar to your thoughts.