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UNLUCKY THIRTEEN
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2002 Poetry LET ME COUNT YOUR WAYS TO THE EGRESS
First, I saw you with another girl
Second, I heard that she’s now pregnant
Third, she arranged an appointment for us
Fourth, shall I accept or not?
Fifth, my friends always say
Sixth, you don’t deserve a guy like him
Seventh, if I heed my heart and play deaf ears
Eighth, to ruin she and her baby will be
Ninth, I don’t just reckon what I feel
Tenth, there’s someone out there who needs you more than me
Eleventh, this is all I have to say
Twelfth, get back to her and love her just the same
Thirteenth, damn you, it is she you must be with
ALL WE HAD ARE JUST NOW WATER UNDER THE BRIDGE
I like this, but felt that sixth should have read, "He doesn't deserve a girl like you" for if they were friends they wouldn't have said "You don't deserve a guy like him"
other than that I find it was from the heart, and that is how poetry should come from.
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Lola:
Nice job with this "heartache" poem. Whether real or imagined, I felt these words were very heartfelt and honest. I loved your format. Very imaginative and stream of consciousness. Keep up the good work!
Terry