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rainclouds
the rain clouds comes down and follows me
drenches all my dreams of what i wanted to be
soaked in my pain,fills me up with despise
and everything is meaningless,i just sit here
sit here waiting to die
there is notihng in my life worth living for
im my own disease and i cant find a cure
grips me tightly,steals the life out of me
im broken,this cant be life when misery is all that i see
all the happiness i had pours out of me
i dont think i can keep holding on
everything in my life,torn away from me
untill all my hope is gone
the rainclouds over me
crashes down over me
smashes me,killing me
the rainclouds always over me
I thought it was a really deep poem,
the only thing I would suggest is just fixing the little typos, and maybe rewording some of the sentences.
I usually re-write my poems 3-4 times before I post, I think you get a great end result.
but keep up the good work! I loved the poem(: