I have a box that I keep close to my heart. In this small box are three things that I hold very dear. The box is black with gold swirls covering the surface. The box holds love, family, and freedom for those are the things that comprise my ultimate happiness. Love is extremely important to me because I grew up feeling unloved and unwanted. Now I wrap myself in the love and support of those around me and I feel secure and happy. Family is important to me for similar reasons. My biological family does not support me or help me in any way. For many of them I am an inconvenience and an embarrassment. I have basically been shunned by them. Now I collect family like some people collect coins. My friends become my family and support me more than many members of my biological family. Finally I come to freedom. Freedom is in my box for several reasons. I grew up basically in a box without any freedom. Every single choice in my life down to what I wore and who I knew was controlled by my mother. I never experienced the ability to choose my life for myself. Now I am the one responsible for myself and I know that if something goes wrong I am the one who must deal with the consequences. No one tells me what I can or cannot do and that is something that I will never take for granted. I love being my own person and being free. Love, family, and freedom are all crucial to my ultimate happiness and therefore they are kept in my little box right next to my heart.
you have a talent for describing your unique pains and triumphs in a way so that the reader lives these bits of your life with you--- well done