8 October 2005 - 6:44pm — Ruth Lovejoy (not verified)
I like the idea presented here but haiku can be in several meters most general its five syllables first line 7 second line 5 last night with one central thought. Your piece here has universal message of how we feel at times in our lives .I think it be interesting if you did a haiku about yourself,
I still haven't quite grasped this Haiku thing so I have no comments on that. Great text! You paint a picture that is so precise that I know exactly what you're talking about. But that doesn't mean that your poem is transparent. The text creates more questions than it asks. It keeps you coming back to it with new questions which in turn lead to new possibilities, new interpretations and of course more questions. Neat. I'll try to read more of your stuff. Karl
I like the idea presented here but haiku can be in several meters most general its five syllables first line 7 second line 5 last night with one central thought. Your piece here has universal message of how we feel at times in our lives .I think it be interesting if you did a haiku about yourself,
Great poem. I like it because it is 'universal'; it speaks to just about everyone at some time or another.
~Kate~
I still haven't quite grasped this Haiku thing so I have no comments on that. Great text! You paint a picture that is so precise that I know exactly what you're talking about. But that doesn't mean that your poem is transparent. The text creates more questions than it asks. It keeps you coming back to it with new questions which in turn lead to new possibilities, new interpretations and of course more questions. Neat. I'll try to read more of your stuff. Karl