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unfinished sonnet
your eyes search deep into my ev'ry thought
within your open arms have i been caught
i long to hold you close and keep you here
to keep you safe from all that you may fear
your eyes search deep into my ev'ry thought
within your open arms have i been caught
i long to hold you close and keep you here
to keep you safe from all that you may fear
Dear "Unfinished Sonnet" writer:
Some polite and serious comments on this work.
(I'll sort of rewrite it to my own humble understanding.)
(your) >if you are writing to or of a certain person, then mention the eye-color, if it is only 1-syll.<
Blue eyes search deep into my ev'ry thought.
within your open arms have i been caught
>Personalize it here, too. Make the addressee pay attention< "In my warm,".. "you have"..
i long to hold you close and keep you here..>show a completion of your own fond dream here. "I've longed.."
"to keep you here.."
to keep you safe from all that you may fear
"Love keeps us safe from all that we may fear."
Blue eyes search deep into my ev'ry thought.
In my warm, open arms you have been caught.
I've longed to hold you close, and keep you here
as we are safe from all that we might may fear.
///Just mild suggestions. Take or leave. TR\\\
"Poe" I'm not, nor "Rich" am I,
but I'll be famous, b'ye and b'ye !