I'm locking myself in this chest.
inside of my chest.
my chest full of pain.
I'm wandering around my heart..
wondering if things will ever be the same.
rummaging through the debris..
searching for lost pieces of me.
collecting scraps of a time of pain.
wishing i could find a helpful remain.
something to give me that special closure.
but I'll never know for sure.
the truth lies here in my heart.
in my world that was torn apart.
a hole in the wall.
a huge hurt i never saw.
i was too blind to see.
a sheet called love covering the damage.
these old walls just can't have it.
the sad echo of my voice.
i have no other choice.
I'll sit on my dusty floor alone.
wishing that someone else was home.
glass shattered everywhere.
more pain I'm able to bare.
there's no one here to talk with.
no one to understand.
they all left me stranded.
as stranded as I can.
the windows boarded up.
I can't see where I am, where I'm going.
the weather.
whether it's raining or snowing.
it's up to me to let some light in on this old place.
but I'll do it at my own lazy pace.
maybe he's right.
maybe i do make myself as miserable as can be.
but in this place i always was comfortable.
i always was happy.
the broken picture frames.
the walls carved with unknown names.
a sudden burst of .. energy could this be?
pride? confidence.
here's my chance to see.
take off these wooden bars.
for i want to see the stars.
as the last one is unlocked and here i am in shock.
light shone onto the floor.
I've seen what's really in store.
and outside a sight.. that at one time i thought was right.
yet i made sure it was wrong.
and now i see where I've belonged.
belonged this whole time.
inside of this hollow heart.
this lonely mind.
that was the plan.
to remain inside of.. that jaded boy's hand.
I think this is really, good, i really like how it dosen't leaves felling the pain that it begins with. I do think that you used some words too many times, especially close to each other:I'm locking myself in this chest.
inside of my chest.
my chest full of pain. Perhaps you could find synonyms for "chest"
they all left me stranded.
as stranded as I can. Synonyms would help, again
the weather.
whether it's raining or snowing. weather and whether are 2 different words, but sound the same, it dosen't seem to flow in my opinion.
This is just constructive criticism, and I am by no means an expert, I am only offering my opinion. Otherwise this is a great poem, with a great ending, that many poems, dealing with pain and suffering do not describe. It is original, and a necessary aspect I believe. Keep up the good work!