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*smiles* I almost didn't read this poem because of the title... I have this inordinate fear of what we in the business call "mush". *grins* At any rate, though, I'm really glad I did read it, because this is such a sweet and dear poem! You really did a marvelous job on it.

>I love your smile
>I love your bright blue eyes
>I love the way you smile in pictures so you don't show your braces

That image is fantastic. Perfect. You have already characterized this person so well that we all have our own picture of the "you" in this poem. That last line there is so brilliant! We are talking about a human being here, and you have made it so real.

>I love your red hair
>I love the way you look at me like I'm the only person in the room

Another brilliant line, especially when combined with the final line of the poem.

>I love that crinkle under both of your eyes

And yet again, more realism. I can see this person, and I feel like I have some sort of a connection with this person. You have truly drawn your reader in with your images.

>I love the way you hold my hand
>I love how you play with my thumb
>I love how you tickle my arm
>I love how you kiss my forehead

Might be too much physical description in a row, but not necessarily. It's certainly your call, as it's your poem! *laughs* It's very sweet, regardless.

>I love your earlobes

Hah. *grins* No one says that. Good job.

>I love how you hug me
>I love how you talk to me like I'm the only one that matters

I think your final line is my favorite, and as I pointed out before, it goes well with one of those other lines which I addressed when I read it. *smiles* I think that final line... I don't know... It epitomizes what it is to really like someone and to really understand someone and to really appreciate someone. I always love the feeling of being singled out--"like I'm the only one that matters" and I can understand your sentiment here.

Overall, you've done a great job. Oftentimes I find "list poems" to be trite, but this is sweet. *grins* Great work!