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HANG ON
IN JUST A FEW HOURS
YOU WILL WED
THE MOST IMPORTANT DAY
OF ONES LIFE
HANG ON FOR THE RIDE
IT MIGHT GET WILD
BOTH OF YOU WILL STEP UPON
THE EMOTIONAL ROLLER COASTER
DON'T LET THE STRESS GET YOU DOWN
REMEMBER ON SATURDAY AT NOON
YOU ARE TO WED THE MOST BEAUTIFUL LADY IN TOWN.
Hi Renee This was an interesting read, with maybe some hidden meaning. Great work! Roz :)
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Hello there Renee, Very nice poem you wrote here girl, i liked the way you described your feeling about a wedding and starting a new life in a marriage.I had been wondering about you lately a lot...kind of worry about you kid..are you Ok?praying I am that you are..i havent heard much about you lately...i know all of us are very busy and with the holidays and all much more doing so many things...you havent been posting new poetry lately ...like you used to..I am sensing something going on with you, something not right or is it me?i just have this strong sense you are not feeling good about something...i hope very bad that I am wrong this time about this doing with you...but whatever is going on.. if it is ...please hang on there kid!and please continue on writing your poetry and start posting again...I really miss you and care for you my dear friend...even if you dont believe me, I really do...and I miss you a lot. I wish you a very wonderful Christmas Eve and Happy New Year! and may the Lord be always with you Renee... Lots of love, peace and joy. Your friend that cares, Dorian
I like the ideas behind this, but I have to say that all in caps and no punctuation made it seem a little tricky to read. The first part IN JUST A FEW HOURS YOU WILL WED THE MOST IMPORTANT DAY OF ONES LIFE Sounds a bit like you are getting married to a day! Maybe throw a comma or two in there, even a full-stop (live dangerously :) ) It's a good poem, and a bit of punctuation will only help, not hinder it, I think !