The Eastern Crest (I)

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The prevalent source of Heaven’s issued sun meant never gloom on the island scraped and swindled upon the predominantly desolate edge of their seemingly boundless world. To speak of dying trees meant to obstruct your spirit with the sin of crude and utter fabrication, for the trees on the Eastern Crest fathom only their intentions of the concession continuum, or natures divine schematic of ever habitual growth, conspired by flowers and greenery which share its twin typicality. The sponsorship of such amplitude is the domain of an archaic root etched beneath the soil which swim with the marrow of bone by the corroding flesh of a million soldiers who have died to protect this land. This is why organism on this terrain never breach commencement to the life of after.For the Eastern Crest... is sacred ground
To marvel, was the epic transition from night to day, welcomed to the animals which succeeded its resolve and envied by the creatures whom happened to stray from its borders. Sometimes the rain would splat the ground and when such was dwelling from the heavens, God made sure that every independent dribble was crafted and mastered to praise the esteem of natures infamous rubric of artistic brilliance. Sometimes the wind would never fail to rift along the prairies of the invincible, invisible atmosphere. Though this was barely to be considered wind but air swiftly transitioned between the rib cages of natures forbearer and exhaled back into the air with a ruthless rush, like to Dragon exertion. Strong and stout did their structure remain even after the angry gust struck the high bolted limbs, denying its effort to unfasten its tenacity to the earth. They were the tallest and most entertaining blossom of the Eastern Crest, old weathered and tired and yet still so immaculate, as they restricted the sun, their shadows reserving light as their own content, conscripting its creatures to travel through its shade from time to time.
Though the Landscapes marvelous beauty diverts the ignorant voyagers attention, it is the task to interpret proper perception of life within the Eastern Crest that will leave a wanderer bewildered. At peace may this Crest seem to the plebeian eye whom watches its beings commute from an incredible expansion but it is the Eagle’s eye which sees the war of prey and predator, the unnerving struggle of the hopeless beetle, itching to seek loose for he has gone immobile, stuck with a not ending stand in the sand.In the kingdom of wild there are no laws for combines of murder, death meant survival for the opposite being such so their counterpart can kill thee to survive and the same fate shall follow by means of their own demise. To be presumed were these concludes of nature but the thick of pink mist which coveted the day air was thick like the erosion of stink from a devoured body festered by three full armies of maggots. This pink vapor, produced and radiated,... evaporation from the circle of life.

To be continued

Author's Notes/Comments: 

I took an old short story I wrote in 7th grade and refined it to make as sharp a piece of unique literature as I could. I think of it as the HD edition lol

please tell me what you think.

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Wow that is really cool about

Wow that is really cool about your script writing friends thoughts on this piece. You have helped me to feel noticed and in ways special, something all up and comers creed for from their peers. again the so much friend. I cant wait to share an read more of each others work. Do not forget you are an amazing talent as well, ready to be launched above this environment for potential writers and examine how your efforts and magic shine in you as well. So lets Keep writing! lol and thank you, really thank you


 

Ascesa e rialzarsi fino a quando gli agnelli diventano leoni

Rise and Rise again until Lambs become lions

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Wow, now that is an

Wow, now that is an absolutely cracking piece of text, it flows so fast, i absolutely love it. :) thanks for posting it here. Just massive amounts of Wow are evident, its like im reading a spoken word poetry piece, like something polar bear would speak, but with an almost dickensian element of almost personal description. They say a picture speaks a thousand words. With these words you have created a picture better than any painter or creator of art. It is truly amazing, i cant explain how cool it is in this small comment. But i am vastly impressed to think you are my age, you have become someone i aspire to be now. you said to me once you never got the hang of ryhmed poetry, well you disproved that point here didnt you. Seriously, if you dont get in an anthology soon then there is no hope for not just me but for pretty much all young poetry. I am truly wonderstrcuk and absolutely amazed. You are a fantastic writer. I love this, i love your work keep it going. Im gonna stop this small essay on basically how much i love you and this piece now. But seriosuly. Its so top notch you would not believe. Massive props to you. You are someone i look up to now. Dont dissapoint. :) MUCH LOVE for this.


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thanks captn, I have not

thanks captn, I have not heard from you in a while. Its so cool to contact you again and your praise and encouragement has literally sprung my confidence as a writer to amazing levels and I must credit you for the support. Thank you so much for your criticisms, When I hear from you, I never fail to remember that amongst such a stupid generation of children, there are some that hold a distinct nobility above the rest. I am thankful that I have acquainted myself with you and I always look forward to swapping knowledge between us

Again thx so much for you acknowledgment, it helps more than you could imagine.


 

Ascesa e rialzarsi fino a quando gli agnelli diventano leoni

Rise and Rise again until Lambs become lions

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My friend, i appreciate your

My friend, i appreciate your friendship here very much, i love it when i get a comment from you, i have to add however that all of the praise i gave you on this piece was if anything more than deserved. I, a man who has read classics, was blown away. When i showed this to a scriptwriting friend of mine his reaction was "miltonesque isnt it". To be compared to a canonical text which was a mans lifes work at the age of 17. You could become the best of us my friend.


I'm sorry i wasn't who you thought i was. F**k it, i'm sorry i wasn't who i thought i was.
...I bought the heartbreak hotel on my own with no investors, closed it down and opened the F**k you, get over it bed and breakfast