"Puppies" (Sometimes, Walking Away is a Zero Sum Game)

I remember the night you cried,
the night you thought I died,
and how you begged me
to give it all up and go into teaching.
The nights I didn't come home.
The times you chose to be alone.
I think we both forgot
that each of us carried
a different burden
and had simply
worn down under the weight
meant for more than two,
but each of us carrying it alone.
And I will always remember
how you walked pass me,
wouldn't look at me,
said you loved me,
and walked away.

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running_with_rabbits's picture

:) I am a fan of the

:) I am a fan of the title..its very random in a rabbits way ;)

 

also love the lines

"worn down under the weight

meant for more than two"


just sayin may be a poem credited to you on my site soon ;)


Much Love

Ashley

Faded_shades's picture

;-)

I thought you might like the title. It's nice & tangental ;-) (and all my other titles were SO lame ;-)

running_with_rabbits's picture

Oh man Beavis my love your

Oh man Beavis my love your titles are NOT lame :)


Much Love

Ashley

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;-)

if so, only because I've studied at the feet of the Master ;-) 

running_with_rabbits's picture

:p

my titles have been lame these days


Much Love

Ashley

Beavis's picture

Not so Dear

You recently left me speechless...I couldn't breath ;-)

running_with_rabbits's picture

? when?

? when?


Much Love

Ashley

allets's picture

Puppies?

Watching puppies is insightful, examining connotations, the layers are fine, the immediacy, the thereness - equals clarity - pure observation commingled with emotion - awesome write! ~~A~~


 

 

Faded_shades's picture

Thank you Lady A!!!

I thought the title might be a little too obscure. Probably should've posted elsewhere but for several reasons, I posted here. I've updated the title, but this one is chasing me! ;-)

allets's picture

Titles

I seldom worry about titles - end of love affairs or parting or separations are tough enough - the title has meaning to you and that's all that's important really -  slc


 

 

Faded_shades's picture

Ahh, but the chase...the

Ahh, but the chase...the pursuit to close the circle on a poem, and so often I feel I fail before I begin. This is a perfect example. I don't think my connotation with the title translates well to a reader. Grrrrrr! Maybe I'm just chasing my own tail! As always, I value your insights & guidance, Lady A! ;-)