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People who are brave
Willing to fight for their country
Ignoring the dangers in their path
Swords clanging; bullets flying
The sounds of war are there
yet not.
Real patriots never get credit.
All of the men that died fighting
gave their lives so that the living so-called
"patriots" can go home and tell their tale
of how they were almost killed and
the "dead patriots" are forgotten

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I wrote this years about before 9/11. It was actually for a project I had to do in high school.



Any comments, good or bad, are welcome. Please leave a comment and let me know if you liked it, how it made you feel or what you didn't like about it. Thanks for taking the time to read my work. :)

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last updated 25 October 2011 - 12:59am
©30 June 2003 - 12:26am — drkpuzzle
31 March 2011 - 4:43am — palewingedpoetess
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The dead ones they always refer to as the real heroes.

Every interview with a vetern I always hear the same thing. 'I was just doing my job' Look at Sal Giunta who won the Medal of honor. Those were his exact words. He didn't feel he should be singled out when every day other guys do way more and give way more (meaning their lives) fighting for their country too. He would only accept it on behalf of all his fellow soldiers. He got choked up and was obviously uncomfortable about the whole ordeal when interviewed. Most true veterans/ patriots are humble. Perhaps you knew a few yourself who spoke in such a way. Keep in mind though,  they were probably that way long before they ever joined the military and that arrogance didn't get washed out of them in boot camp but I would not attest such a notion to all living patriots. Besides many see those men who died on the battlefield as their brothers in arms. I find most veterans/ patriots extremely respectful and humble and I am near certain soldiers who come home with P.T.S.D. do not feel so proud of their service in combat but rather wish they didn't have such vivid nightmarish memories. For a high school student, this poem construction wise is fairly good. The content just came off as seeming rather cavalier........... thanks for sharing. I look forward to reading something newer, more fresh and invigorating. Sincerely Melissa Lundeen.

22 October 2011 - 4:40am — drkpuzzle
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Thank you for the kind words.

Thank you for the kind words. This is the whole reason I actually started writing. My English teacher made up write poetry and I thought it was going to be a horrible project but it turned out to be quite the opposite.

The only real failure in life is not to be true to the best one knows.--Buddha