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6:15 Bus

Poor Jimmy

Unloved and unoticed

There is nothing for him here

In Wheatly, in life



He enters, bells ring

Joyfully

He checks his watch

Scars, painful reminders

6pm, the bus

To the bridge leaves

Quarter after



Again bells ring

Sour

A man, a gun

Life and money

Hand in hand



Clerk starts to

Sweat

"May I help you"

Whispers

Hush

Barely Audible



Fear

Jimmy goes unoticed



Gunman leaves

Rich in success

Tires screetch



Relief

Jimmy walks

Unloved and unoticed



Unscathed



6:13

He'll miss the bus



Maybe



He'll just walk,



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Author's Notes/Comments: 

This was for english, I had to read an article on a robbery and portray emotion. But I wanted to do it my way. I think I scared my teacher:P!

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©19 October 2004 - 10:14pm — cry_rain
22 January 2005 - 8:40pm — We're All Alone (not verified)
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I like this, i like the time i spent reading it.

2 November 2004 - 8:36pm — Harry Fubash (not verified)
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really really good.
it reads like glimpses through a newspaper.
very original.

18 March 2005 - 1:32pm — Tika Gregory (not verified)
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SJ!
i LOVE LOVE LOVE this one!
you're so damn good at writing!
love ya!
keep up the good work, hun!