Deep Within

We can fight it out, light it out, scream and shout it out,
But baby please don’t leave me out!
I need to know, I need to hear, I need you to tell me you want me here
Cuz it’s the way we love, the way we move, the way you want me and the way we care,
It’s the days that turn gray when your not here, it’s the sunniest days when we wake up near,
It’s the way you love me like you have no fear,
In your arms, you in mine..The the way you smile, and the ways I’ve cried,
It’s the way I want you like no other guy…
It’s the sunny skies and the rainy nights, it’s the lazy mornings waking up to your eyes…
Like the sweetest love song ever written, like the most divine fruit ever bitten,
like these feelings were heavenly bidden, like the deepest secret ever been hidden,
My love fro you baby, comes from deep within...

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SSmoothie's picture

Like the most Devine fruit...

This is definitely worth a read! Now poems that are this good need better structure and I believe that a few returns and a couple of paragraphs will make this look as good as it sounds! Well done i really enjoyed it cheers SS


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

craziiseciicooll's picture

yeah lol i have alot to learn

yeah lol i have alot to learn :) right now i m just writing the thoughts in my head! thankyu so much for ur feedback :)

facethetruth2b's picture

Absoulutly LOVE IT...Great

Absoulutly LOVE IT...Great write....So much feeling into it..


you laugh at me because I am differant, I laugh at you because You are all the same ...(KoRn) J.D......

craziiseciicooll's picture

thankyou :)

thankyou :)

Mardigan's picture

Awesome rhymes and timing,

Awesome rhymes and timing, straight from your heart. Good deal!

craziiseciicooll's picture

thankyou :)

thankyou :)