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Constructive Criticism by Nancy Wallace
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useless "This poem is sick. Som of us have been abused, and we don't think stuff like this is very funy. So fuck you and you're stupid poem."
- Nancy Wallace
ilovesugarray0@lycos.com
a critique posted on the poem
"Child on his Breath"
Being that this woman's email address is "ilovesugarray0" i can not be entirely hurt or offended by her words. i can only apologize to her family and any children she may have. she should not procreate seeing how her being a government project gone wrong will never benefit society. the lack of oxygen getting to her brain is also a concern of mine, considering a lack of oxygen leads to brain damage, i feel this woman is beyond hope. if i were her doctor i would take her computer away and pull the plug. "Some" is spelled with an "e", funny is not funny when spelled with only one "n". and why oh why did you have to attack my poem? "you're stupid poem." (there is supposed to be a comma after stupid, since going by the word "you're" i am assuming you are addressing the poem.) and since you are in such an insulting mood, an exclamation point would have shown your seriousness and your distaste towards this poem. for example, "you're stupid, Poem!"
perhaps i am being a little mean. perhaps i should not take offense. perhaps i should laugh it off. or better yet, i should take out a pen, and write more poetry...
I am sorry to hear you have been abused. it is a sick and twisted world. I believe that just about everyone in the world were abused in one way or another, and we all have different ways of dealing with the horror. i for example went to therapy and picked up a pen. telling my feelings to a therapist i trusted and to a journal of which i gave my heart. this poem is not about taking this topic lightly. i was not trying to be "funy". this poem is about the cycles abuse plays in today's society. a child who is abused is more likely to grow up to abuse children or other loved ones, than a child who was not. continuing the cycle of abuse that was inflicted on them. they are also more likely to pick partners who are abusers continuing the cycle, continuing to be the victim. one way to break this cycle is to get help. tell someone, talk about it. learn to understand it was not your fault and you do not have to feel guilty, and you do not deserve to be treated this way.
this is a site where poets and writers express themselves. visitors and frequenters of the site can offer criticism or advice. it is a sad thing when someone says awful things just because they had a distaste for it. a simple "not my kind of thing" would have sufficed.
thank you nancy wallace. you have given me one more reason for living. to lead an honest, accepting life. to realize i am human and worthy of air. i accept your critique as a woman that wasted her 15 minutes of fame on me. make your life meaningful....
