shes an ivory promise
she is beyond compare
shes a dreamlike rainstorm
lost upon somewhere
shes a vapor teardrop
shes an icecube sky
she is time forgotten
all thru my eye
little dreamer in my life
youre my sweet vanilla sky
youre the moment that i cry
and if we could stop today
i would take you away
forever
id be your star to shine
if i could just call you mine
id give into your always
shes a dreary daydream
she is a sky so blue
shes an eternal sunset
unchained
untrue
little dreamer lost so far
youre the shine upon my star
youre the junebug in my jar
and if i could begin again
then you would be my zen
eternity
id be your daisy dream
youd be what i cannot see
id give into your nevers
shes the mystic visions
on the dead horizon
shes the dark incision
untouched
unknown
I think it's amazing, it's structure and flow is great, not to mention the words, which are really touching. Well done. :)