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I was wearing a tank top in the desert, and the sun went down
My shoulders were cold.
But he wouldn't put his arms around me.
Instead, he pushed me away.
My shoulders were cold.
But he wouldn't put his arms around me.
Instead, he pushed me away.
Seagulls Soar
the brevity is wonderful
Thank you
I recall Beavis liking this poem a lot. Looking back, I like it too. Thanks for leading me here.
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question
was it the sun or another lover
So short, but it means so
So short, but it means so much. I guess it leaves a lot for the reader to decide what to think for themselves.
Indeed... Hey, I saw this
Indeed...
Hey, I saw this waiter the other day that looks very much like you. I might have told you about him before. Tried to get his picture but for some reason (user stupidity) I couldn't figure out how to take one from my phone quickly enough. Oh well. He really resembles you a lot.
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Weird! I have never met
Weird! I have never met anybody that looks like me in person. Maybe it is my long lost twin! I wonder if I am the evil one? o.o
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I really love this!!! You do these so artfully!
:D Thanks Beavis!! It always
:D Thanks Beavis!! It always makes me smile big when one of my writings captures your attention.
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I haven't had time to read on PP much lately, but this one has been stuck in my mind! Thanks for the gift! ;-)
Cool! I hope that means you
Cool! I hope that means you will be inspired by it. That or you'll warm my shoulders... ;)
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Definately!
All this topten talk got me to thinking and your poem inspired me to start my own spotlight on amazing poems that captured me, so yours is the first. I posted a link on my PP home page. I hope you don't mind?
Wow! Cool!! I feel super
Wow! Cool!! I feel super honored! You just made my night. :) and I get to take these feelings into dreamland. Thanks Beavis!!
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My pleasure & my thank you for sharing this poem! I think what I love so much about this poem is that you have so many of the things I love about poetry woven into it. It's condensed. Everything extraneous is stripped away, leaving nothing but the distilled emotion of the story in poetic form. And there is a level of ambiguity to the events that allow me to insert my own thoughts and emotions into the poem. I enjoy revisiting this poem simply to ponder the scene, the events that preceded and followed the poem. This poem simply inspires me through the richness of its brevity.
Callousness
To be pushed away added injury, to not wish to share warmth was the real crime. - :D slc
Right?
Not very nice.... We all need warmth! Unless it's a hundred degrees, then we might, could use some chillin... ;)
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This is still one of my favs!
This is still one of my favs! I have a copy taped to my desk to remind me that every thought has oh so many loose ends to chase & that is where the beauty hides. ;-)
Awe! That's so cool. I feel
Awe! That's so cool. I feel honored... Thanks, Beav!
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