In A Word

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Vintage Words

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Those rumors of war
as the world erodes
from over use and floods 

periodically occur
because we learn
and forget. We make
faithful predictions

and call them prophesy

so that the unelected

are allowed to speak

at last.

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allets
01-04-15
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Beatnik1979's picture

If

shorter verse with a greater impact was  what you were trying to  put forth, you have attained it.  What I particularly enjoyed was in the first 3 lines...A Biblical sort of feeling brought in like a midstream thought with the use of "and". Bravo! 

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I Did It

but the physical device was automatic, but I appreciate very much the analysis "and" as midstream thought helped me understand what I did. Thanks - Lady A

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Lady A